IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

#foods #people #food
Nowadays, demanding for
food
 is a huge trouble for many countries. To deal with it, some countries have imported
food
 from oversea, yet someone
believe
Suggestion
believes
 that using local nutrient is more environmentally and economically. In my point of view, the benefits of doing that are far more than
drawbacks
Suggestion
the drawbacks
. There are two main reasons why using domestic
food
 products will have upper advantages.
Firstly
, local foods are more environmentally than imported foods. Because they have been
plated
(used especially of ideas or principles) deeply rooted; firmly fixed or held
planted
 and farm in local habitat for a long time, by using it, people can help the natural
food
 chain operates smoothly.
In addition
, every species in
this
 local habitat have
benefitcial
Suggestion
benefited
beneficial
benefitted
benefits
benefit
 from it too. And
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 important reason If people use domestic
food
 product is that it will improve the
econnomy
the system of production and distribution and consumption
economy
. While the shipping fee is saved, the market price of the
food
also
 drop down too. And
then
 both consumers and sellers have
benefits
Suggestion
benefited
. Apart from the practical advantage expressed above, it still have few minor drawbacks. Without imported foods, the diversity of
food
 sources will not
acquired
Suggestion
acquire
, which can lead to
food
 shortage If the country got hit by a
disater
a state of extreme (usually irremediable) ruin and misfortune
disaster
 like drought or flood. Beside that, exotic
food
 products can give consumers a chance to taste the
food
 which they never can find in
local market
Suggestion
local markets
the local market
. In conclusion,
although
 eating local
food
have
Suggestion
has
 a huge advantage for local environment and
econommy
the system of production and distribution and consumption
economy
, people must consider diversity
food
 sources for national long-term
food
 stocking.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
What to do next:
Look at other essays: