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Some parents are worried about the increase level of violence,tv,videogame and other type of entertainment for children leisure,how does this affect children? How do you this problem can be tackled?

#parents #level #violence #tv #videogame #type #entertainment #children #leisure #affect
Yes
,
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,
it is true some parents are
anxioused
 about the increase of
violence
 in various audio and videos visual and entertainment effect on children leisure and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. In upcoming
paragraph we
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paragraph, we
 are discussing about both and how
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 effects on
children life
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a child's life
child's life
 style
Firstly television
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Firstly, television
 and play station are two major source of entertainment in
modern era
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the modern era
. In our free time Mostly children like to watch TV and play games. They almost watch action and
adventures
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adventure
 movies. These movies are
base
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based
 on
retition
 purpose.
On the other hand
. In our free time children listen
violence
 songs whom are based on weapon and other
violence
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violent
 material
.
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.
after
Suggestion
After
watching long time
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long time watching
 these programs start effect on brain that's result is children starts fight with each other, disobeying the rules, arguing with elders and many more. The conclusion is that they lose our aim. Some set their attitude like actors In my opinion to tackle these harassment
firstly
 parents should aware
from
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of
 our children.
Secondly government
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Secondly, government
 should
prohibited
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prohibit
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 type of
violence
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violent
 material.
Thirdly in
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Thirdly, in
 school and other institutions should set up
seminar
Suggestion
a seminar
 on non
violence
 topics and motivational stories. These stories can be inspired the children.
At
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As
last
 director of movies should make films based on some
legent
a story about mythical or supernatural beings or events
legend
elegant
 martyrs life style.

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