Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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It is undeniable fact that every countries monuments and historical sites are there Heritage.
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a fair
amount
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of people believe that
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tourist visiting to
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tourists visiting
tourists visiting to
the tourist visiting to
these areas must be charged more than the local inhabitants. I
do not completely accorded
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do not complete accord
do not completely accord
with
this
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idea and believe that a
charge
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should be exactly the same. To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the foreign visitors should not be charged more than the local people.
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Firstly it
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Firstly, it
is a one of the most indispensable source of revenue income for the government if they
charge
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more from the
tourist
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then
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than
the number of visitors will be
decline
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declined
. If the number of
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tourist
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tourists
will
decrease
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decrease, then
then
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the income of the nation will
also
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decrease.
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, the historical sites are the only things through which modern generation can lapse about their ancestors and their actions. If the government
charge
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expensive tickets from the visitors
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this
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not appreciate the
foreigners to
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foreigners to visit
visit
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to our country and see
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this sites
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this site
these sites
however
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they already have to spend a large
amount
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of
money
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on tickets, on hotels where they have to stay and many other necessary things. The foreigners
visit
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more than the local peoples to these historical monuments because these things are common for the local public. To illustrate, a large
amount
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of
tourist
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visit
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to Taj Mahal to see its beauty and to know about its history
where as
on the other hand
whereas
in India there are various museums which the foreigners prefer to see to know about the culture. In Amritsar the visitor
go
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goes
to Golden temple to know its history and there is
also
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show
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shown
Sada Pinda where all Punjabi culture was depicted. The foreigners are attracted by these things and if these things will
destroyed
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destroyed, then
destroy then
destroy destroy then
then
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they cannot
visit
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to our Nation and we cannot a
use
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usable
useable
usage
amount
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of
money
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from them.
Secondly
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, The
Tourist
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Industry was essential for the growth of every Nation. The
Tourist
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come from the other Nations and
also
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buy a handicraft by which small scale industry was
progressed
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progressing
. They
also
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eat different kinds of using from the restaurants and
also
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stay in the hotels which is a good source of employment in a nation. If the historical
aur
introduces an alternative
or
area
aura
old buildings were
destroyed
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destroyed, then
then
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the modern buildings are not used as how many hotels and restaurants will be
blade
the fluid (red in vertebrates) that is pumped through the body by the heart and contains plasma, blood cells, and platelets
blood
and if the visitors will not come
then
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it will be of no use. To conclude the government should not
charge
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a large
amount
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of
money
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from the visitors than the local public. If they do
this
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by The
Tourist
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Industry
then
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there will be no growth and development of the nation because they earn a large
amount
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of
money
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from them.
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