big salary is much more important than job satisfaction do you agree or disagree?

it
Suggestion
It
is often argued that having a
job
that offers high
salary
is way better than being happy with your work.
however
Suggestion
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strongly disagree with
this
statement
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think people that are happy with their
job
is greater than having high wage
job
.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that being happy with your own
job
can give you more motivation more than money that you can get.
if
Suggestion
If
people are happy with their
job
, they are likely to be more motivated and work hard
everyday
Suggestion
every day
.
also
Suggestion
Also
, their
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
can pay off with great
result
Accept comma addition
result, such
such
as being
famous rich
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famous, rich
high position and they will be so proud of themselves.
for
Suggestion
For
instance, a
south
Suggestion
South
korean
of or relating to or characteristic of Korea or its people or language
Korean
boy band named BTS they were not famous when they just debuted and they
recieved
conforming to the established language usage of educated native speakers
received
little
money but
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money, but
then
because of their passion about being singers and dancers, they kept on trying to
persude
win approval or support for
persuade
their dream and they're happy with it after many years of trying with their motivation and their
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
,
Accept space
,
Now they have become the biggest boy band in 2020.
it
Suggestion
It
is the fact that have a happy
job
will really give you more motivation to your everyday life.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
, people that happily work
tend
Suggestion
tends
to be less
pressure
than having a high
salary
job
.
Accept space
.
if
Suggestion
If
you keep on doing things that don't make you happy, it will give you more
pressure
even you get
alot
Suggestion
a lot
of money and you will not be excited about it.
being
Suggestion
Being
happy with your own
job
is the best thing you will ever have because happy
job
will give you less stress and less
pressure
.
for
Suggestion
For
example, Namjoon he is a rapper and he was once working at a company because he is smart his company offered him a high
salary but
Accept comma addition
salary, but
then
he still left the company and follow his dream as a rapper and being stress-free from his old
job
.
Accept space
.
it
Suggestion
It
is true that
job
satisfaction will give you less
pressure
than a high wage
job
. in conclusion, i believe that
job
satisfaction is much better than high
salary
job
because it give you less pressurre and being more motivated

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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