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If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to drastically change our way of life. What is your opinion?

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“The end is just beginning” – environmentalists said after a series of natural disasters occurred all over the world
last
 month. Some people state that human change
their
people in general
they
 way they treat the Earth
otherwise
 nothing can survive.
However
, others argue that it is not necessary. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both points of view and agree with the idea that these serious changes are inevitable. On the one hand, some people suppose that we should not alter our lifestyle since
nature
Suggestion
naturally
 stabilizes
itself
the thing named or in question
it
 and these disasters appeared in the past at the same levels. In fact, there were some recorded storms and earthquakes with even more serious consequences than at the present.
Therefore
,
instead
 of allocating our way of life, they assure that we should find the ways to live with it.
However
, I believe that those who have these thoughts are too optimistic and our planet is on the edge calling for prompt actions.
Firstly
, these extreme weather conditions
happen
Suggestion
happens
 regularly recently due to climate change
that is
 mainly driven by human activities
such
 as industrial zones widening, deforestation for farming, increasing world population.
Secondly
,
impact
Suggestion
the impact
 of human on the environment is undeniable, from
overhunting
 to pollute the environment, following by the destroying wildlife habitats and the extinction of many species of animals and plants. Once the natural balance is broken, it will lead to unforeseen consequences. In conclusion, I believe that the actions that improve the friendly
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of human to our planet should be conducted immediately in order to save the future of the Earth.
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