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Some students find certain subjects, such as maths and philosophy, difficult. So, some people argue that these subjects should not be compulsory for all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #subjects #maths #philosophy #people
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The pie charts compare the highest level of
education
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 achieved by women in
Someland
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Some land
 across two years, 1945 and 1995. According to the pie charts, women received a much higher level of
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 in 1995, than they did in 1945. In the
year
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 1945, 35% of girls weren't going to school
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with
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to
 the
year
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 1995 when the percentage was 0. Throughout the
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 1945, only 1% of women had completed their
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degree
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 of studies, no one their post-graduate and 35% their
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degree
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. Only 15% of females had done their sixth
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 of studies, 10% their ninth
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 and 4% their twelfth
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. The situation had changed radically by 1995. In the
year
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 1995, 50% of girls had finished their
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degree
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 in
education
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, 20% their post-graduate and no one their
first
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degree
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. No one of
women
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the women
 had completed their sixth and twelfth
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 of studies. Just 10% of females had done their ninth
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 of
education
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.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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