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Some people believe that a person’s intelligence is inherited from the parents, while others believe that their environment is the main factor. Discuss these views. Which factor do you think is mostly responsible for intelligence?

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People have different attitude about
cleverness
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. While some of them believe that
intelligence
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 is acquisitive, others
point
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 out it is inheritable. Both sides will be discussed as below. An opinion asserting that the
intelligence
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 is acquisitive. Advocates of
this
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 opinion
point
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 out that
way of
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way, of
 upbringing has
significant effect
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a significant effect
 on the level of
cleverness
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.
This
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 means that if parents make their children encounter with some mental challenges, their brain breed drastically better that children with lack of stimulus.
For example
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, some games
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 as chess and problem solving games would boost their mental abilities.
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, there are evidences that consuming nutrient foods
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 as vitamins and minerals enhance
brain ability
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the brain's ability
brain's ability
 which have substantial influence on
intelligence
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 quality.
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, allocating time for children to play and speak to them is contributing factor that enhance
cleverness
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.
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, approach of parents in bringing up their children ranging from consuming nutrients to play and time allocation for children would be beneficial for children to raise their
cleverness
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. Opponents of the mentioned
point
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 of view believe that
intelligence
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 is inheritable. These supporters
point
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 to the role of DNA and genes that transfer
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intelligence
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the intelligence
 from parents to children. They provide some examples that some clever or genius people have had clever parents.
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Also they
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Also, they
 assert that as the brain forms before the birth so that the
intelligence
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 will be congenital and the environment do not have any effective role on
cleverness
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. In
this
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 regard, supporters present Einstein as an instance who was
inheritably
capable of being inherited
inheritable
 intelligent. In conclusion, it appears that both sides comprising of inherit and
environment
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the environment
 are effective on
intelligence
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 and their roles should not be neglected.
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