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More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating

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Interactions between individuals have changed dramatically overt the
last
 two decades. Electronic
gadgests
a device or control that is very useful for a particular job
gadgets
 are widely used to communicate rather than meeting people.
This
 essay will discuss some benefits and drawbacks of using the technology. On the one hand,
Socalizing
the act of meeting for social purposes
socializing
 has improved a lot after the invention of the internet and smartphones. People have become active and smarter nowadays as they could connect other people and discuss subjects related
of
Suggestion
to
 their
intersts
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interests
interest
. Social media applications
such
 as Facebook, Whataspp and Twitter have provided platforms to interact freely with the outside world.
Moreover
, Employees have opted virtual meetings via platforms
such
 as zoom,
skype
Suggestion
Skype
 rather than travelling to the locations of
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
 meetings.
This
 cutting edge
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 has saved a lot of money and time.
On the other hand
,
Cyber Crime rate
Suggestion
the Cyber Crime rate
 has
also
 increased among
teengers
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
teen-agers
. Scammers use various softwares
such
 VPN data, Incognito to find targets and steal their money. Credit card scam,
for example
, according to the reports by Times India in the year 2015, many credit
card
Suggestion
cards
 and its pin numbers were stolen by using Demand software. The officers could not locate the criminals
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they could not trace them and their identity was hidden. So, care must be taken while interacting online with the
starngers
anyone who does not belong in the environment in which they are found
strangers
. In conclusion,
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 has progressed and has changed the way people interact with people at
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
workplaces
 and socializing,
however
, if care is not taken, people can face many
socail
relating to human society and its members
social
 problems
such
 crime and theft.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Convenience
  • Instant messaging
  • Video calls
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Economical
  • Accessibility
  • Physical barriers
  • Nuanced understanding
  • Impersonal
  • Misunderstandings
  • Reliance
  • Technical failures
  • Vulnerable
  • Security breaches
  • Hacking
  • Data theft
  • Sensitive information
  • Digital communication
  • Face-to-face interactions
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