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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Which one do you agree with? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is irrefutably true that there exist two schools of thought
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 have opposing views when it comes to the way
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 should expend his/her leisure
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 school of thought stresses the fact that recreational
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 is better utilized if invested in cognitive activities,
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 the other group
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 on relaxing the mind. To set the wheels in motion, there are some people who subscribe to the idea that being mentally active is a better course of action to spend
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’s free
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 wisely. Though it’s not necessary,
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 is involved in jobs which demand high use of cerebral faculties and
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, they are always on their toes 
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 the most out of their spare
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 to sharpen their skills.
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, some individuals opine that taking complete rest and doing nothing is more pertinent to spend
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 free
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 could be the group, though not mandatorily, of people who have physically demanding jobs.  It is more often than not, acknowledged that everyone requires leisure
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 to emerge out of the stresses of work and everyday life. My belief is that being active suits me better rather than sitting idle during my free
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. Be that as it may, I surmise that what we do with our spare
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 is our choice and no
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what particular activity is the best. To encapsulate it all, different people employ varied methods to spend their free
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, which may or may not involve brainy activities.
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, the way
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 chooses to utilize
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 is a personal preference, and
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 a more significant thing would be to enjoy yourself rather than debating about how to do it.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • mental stagnation
  • intellectually stimulating
  • relaxation
  • meditation
  • stress reduction
  • overall well-being
  • personal development
  • life satisfaction
  • sense of achievement
  • emotional balance
  • peace of mind
  • scientific evidence
  • memory
  • learning
  • creativity
  • emotional regulation
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