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The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between! 1980 and 2012.

The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between! 1980 and 2012.
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The line graph compares the amount of
electricity
 produced in France using four different sources of
power
 over a
period
 of 32 years.
It is clear that
 nuclear
power
 was by far the most important means of
electricity
 generation over the
period
 shown. Renewables provided the lowest amount of
electricity
 in each year. In 1980, thermal
power
 stations were the main source of
electricity
 in France, generating around 120
terawatt
hours
 of
power
. Nuclear and hydroelectric
power
 stations produced just under 75
terawatt
hours
 of
electricity
 each, and renewables provided a negligible amount. Just one year later, nuclear
power
 overtook thermal
power
 as the primary source of
electricity
. Between 1980 and 2005,
electricity
 production from nuclear
power
 rose dramatically to a peak of 430
terawatt
hours
.
By contrast
, the figure for thermal
power
 fell to only 50
terawatt
hours
 in 1985
,
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and remained at
this
 level for the rest of the
period
. Hydroelectric
power
 generation remained relatively stable, at between 50 and 80
terawatt
hours
, for the whole 32-year
period
, but renewable
electricity
 production saw only a small rise to approximately 25
terawatt
hours
 by 2012.

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