Parents want to achieve balance between family and career but only a few manage to achieve it. What do you think is the reason? Discuss possible solutions and provide examples.

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In current scenario every human has run

rat race

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a rat race

the rat race

for

fulfil

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fulfilling

their rudimentary needs. Everyone wants to balance their professional and relational

life

in better ways;

however

, some get success to manage it but some not

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The primary cause of

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

cuts threats

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cuts, threats

competition and the possible solution is that dividing responsibility with each others. To embark with, there are some possible reasons which create a problem to assemble the personal and business

life

. The cut

threats competition

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threats, competition

biggest problem

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the biggest problem

in modern society because everyone

want

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wants

to earn more capital in little time. Owing to these factor parents hinge on money rather than caring the family members.

For example

accountant

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an accountant

the accountant

is that kind of job in which people spent more time outside than at home.

Moreover

, in present era maximum people love to live in

necular

(weapons) deriving destructive energy from the release of atomic energy

nuclear

family, in which parents want two bread winner for better future of own their kids

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but in

this

situation they forgetful about their

children

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child

child's

care. Due to

this

factor misunderstanding has become in personal

life

Nevertheless

, there

are

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some possible solution if parents are following these steps than they can easily manage office work and family responsibilities.

Initially

, everyone should have to plan and do things in advance. Employee as an example, he has to do 35 hours work in a week and making some schedule to go outside with family members on weekends.

Furthermore

, every human

should has

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should have

to divide role and responsibility because in modern days bot parents are working. In

thisway

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this way

father

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a father

the father

should take some household work with mother to balance the

life

style.

This

type of activity

also put

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also puts

positive impact

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a positive impact

infants

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infant

mind and they can learn how to manage the family power. To conclude, everyone

learn

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learns

about their strength and weakness of their

life

. Taking responsibility is only one factor to assign the better

life

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Parents want to achieve balance between family and career but only a few manage to achieve it. What do you think is the reason? Discuss possible solutions and provide examples.

Fully explain your ideas

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