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Some people believe that the most important aspect of their job is their salary. Others think that the job itself is the most important. What do you think is the most important aspect of a job? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

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personally I believed that there are two kinds of home that one who did see you more
salary
 tomorrow you
work
 tomorrow you get
salary
 and other
work
 in which only status or some post origin designation are matter in which you get you get some
salary
 but not I am
salary
 for as you working properly but if you want to take
type
 of
work
 in which you give you
also
 get
salary
 plus good post
then
 you have to
work
 like that because if you are doing labour
work
then
 obviously for the more you
work
 tomorrow you get the
salary
 but if you are doing some some blazer
type
 of
work
 and still you 122 what
salary
 your much more money to so you have to do some different and likes share share market or anything is released business and their kind of
job
 are included teaching
job
 I am Pi personal believe that teaching
job
 is is is is not working
job
 but it's a man's
job
 there are two part of
job
 in which you can do the shop the fun is for in which you have to apply on concept for mind your intelligence and one
job
 is that
type
 of
job
 in which you have to apply physically
work
this
 both
type
 of
work
 are define that how you get
salary
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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