IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

some people agree with spending lots of money on large wedding while other think it is waste of money what is tour opinion.

#people #lots #money #waste #tour
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Marriage is a personal commitment in every culture of our country. Absolute. Some people assume with investing big
amount
Use synonyms
 of
money
Use synonyms
 on large weddings whilst other think it is a complete waste of
money
Use synonyms
. In the upcoming paragraphs we are elaborating both and
then
Linking Words
 will give our opinion.
FIRSTLY
Linking Words
, marriage is a mandatory event of human life. It creates precious memories that couple can remember for their life.
On the other hand
Linking Words
 couple can celebrate
this
Linking Words
 movement with our family members and friends.
Secondly
Linking Words
, some families spend immense
amountssupply
Suggestion
 on wedding to pretend or show our status.
Linking Words
in
Suggestion
In
 addition,
suchsuch
Suggestion
such such
 occasions give family members and friends to get together. On the flip side. Large wedding is
also
Linking Words
 a waste of
amount
Use synonyms
. Some parent gets generous at a peak rate of interest for adorning preparation of wedding the conclusion is that those are under the pile of loans.
For instance
Linking Words
 previous year a father committed suicide. Because he got a huge
amount
Use synonyms
 of loan from the bank and could not return back. On the other disadvantage of expensive wedding has spurred competition between parents. Parents invest big
amount
Use synonyms
 on their
children
Suggestion
children's
 wedding parties as the result is that their neighbour and friends starts comparing to do so. AT
Linking Words
last
the superlative of 'little' that can be used with mass nouns and is usually preceded by 'the'; a quantifier meaning smallest in amount or extent or degree
least
 in my opinion,
although
Linking Words
 parents imagine huge
amount
Use synonyms
 of
money
Use synonyms
 spend is marriage brings happiness and contentment. On the other side, they can utilise
this
Linking Words
money
Use synonyms
 for their children's future or better income ideas.
Submitted by ravinderpalsingh7765 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: