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The diagrams below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates.

The diagrams below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates.
The diagrams illustrate the layout of houses for the cool and warm
temperature
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. The most noticeable changes are seen in the usage of material in the
roof
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 and walls of
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house
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the house
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. The
roof
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 in the cool
climate
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 is
high
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 angled
while
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 in
hot
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the hot
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climate
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, it is triangular in shape with overhangs on both sides.
Entire
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house
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 in
the
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a
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 warm
climate
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 is constructed with thermal building material surrounded by insulation to keep the
house
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 warm
buy
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by
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 storing heat inside it
while
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,
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 reflective
roof
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 material and insulation made the
roof
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 of
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the house
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house
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houses
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 of
other
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another
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climate
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climates
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which
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apply
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also
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 overhangs from both
the
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apply
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side.The other difference is in the design and number of windows as only one window is constructed in
warm
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a warm
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climate
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house
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 that
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also
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is also
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 in the direction of
sun
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the sun
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 to get maximum sun rays in the
house
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 warm
climate
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 homes have two windows opposite to each other under the
roof
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 shades. These are closed and covered in the
day time
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daytime
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 but opened at night to allow air to pass through the
house
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 and cool it naturally.
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, distinct layouts are preferred in different temperatures to combat
with
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the climates.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words roof, house, climate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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