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SURVEY OF PEOPLE WHO VISITED FOUR TYPES OF TOURIST ATTRACTION IN BRITAIN

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The pie chart compares figures for visitors to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different
theme
 parks in Britain in 1999. It is clear that
theme
 parks and museums / galleries were the two most popular types of tourist attraction in that year. Blackpool Pleasure Beach received by far the highest proportion of visitors in the
theme
park
 sector. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that 38% of the surveyed visitors went to a
theme
park
, and 37% of them went to a museum or gallery.
By contrast
, historic houses and monuments were visited by only 16% of the sample, while wildlife parks and zoos were the least popular of the four types of tourist attraction, with only 9% of visitors. In the
theme
park
 sector, almost half of the people surveyed (47%) had been to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Alton Towers was the
second
 most popular amusement
park
, with 17% of the sample, followed by Pleasureland in Southport, with 16%.
Finally
, Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor had each welcomed 10% of the surveyed visitors.

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