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Nowadays, various types of crimes are done by youngsters all over the world and that have increased significantly. In this essay, I will discuss the Issues of why youngsters are interested to do crimes and give them appropriate solutions to this problem.

#crimes #youngsters #world
In recent years, there have been many crimes committed by our young people. They don’t have any
fair
an emotion experienced in anticipation of some specific pain or danger (usually accompanied by a desire to flee or fight)
fear
 of their parents as well as from cops. They do everything which they want to do to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their needs and which leads them into the
crime
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criminal
 world. The number of
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
 has mostly youngsters. Most of the youngsters want to enjoy their
life
 like the richest people, according to their dream they don't have any other chance to make money in their
life
then
 they join some Mafia parties.
they
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They
 don't have any idea about the outcome
from
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of
 that work even their families never know about their
this
 kind of criminal activity. I have one example, in my country, most of the youngsters around age 20 to 30 years are part of most of the drug parties. There have various types of solutions to solve
this
 problem because every problem has its own solution. To reduce
this
 problem from youngster's
life
 for always to do some effective steps are most important to do
by
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with
 our government and by local communities as well as their parents give them some information about that work.
how
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How
that is
 harmful to them and influenced their future.
Firstly
 All Colleges need to pursue a
crime
 world that destroys the
life
 of a person.
Secondly
, if anyone one arrested by
cops
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the cops
 doing lawbreaking activity makes a video and take a picture and upload on social media,
then
 videos and pictures will go viral on social media. They feel some shame and don't do
this
 kind of
crime
again even
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again, even
 others think a lot to do that type of
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
. In Conclusion, the Family and local community give
such
 information about the protection from crimes and save their young generation
from
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of
 the
crime
 world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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