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The given diagrams show the structural process of a wave energy machine and the costs related to different types of those machines based on their locations.

The given diagrams show the structural process of a wave energy machine and the costs related to different types of those machines based on their locations.
The first diagram pictures how a
wave
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energy
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machine
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 works and how
electricity
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 is generated.
According to
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 the diagram, the
wave
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energy
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machine
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 mainly works with a turbine that moves the
water
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 level from the surface and
electricity
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 is generated.
Firstly
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, Air flows towards the
water
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 as the turbine starts moving which generates
water
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waves
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 and directs the
water
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waves
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 towards the
machine
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 and ultimately upwards.
then
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 the
electricity
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 is generated from the
electricity
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 generator section. Generally, based on locations, the diagram
us
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is
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 showing two types
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waves
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of waves
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 in a
wave
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energy
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 appliance. The
machine
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 with large
waves
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 gives larger output than the one with small
waves
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. But the installation cost of the
wave
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energy
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machine
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 located in the large
wave
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 area is higher than that located within the low
wave
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 area. So the drawback against more output is high cost.
To conclude
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, a
wave
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energy
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machine
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 manipulates the
water
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waves
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 and produces
electricity
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.
Moreover
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, the more the
waves
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, the more
electricity
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 is generated associated with a higher cost as a disadvantage.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave, energy, machine, electricity, water, waves with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 14 times.
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