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some people use socialmedia to keep in touch with others and new events do you think advantages this techniques outweight the dis advantages

#people #socialmedia #touch #events #techniques #outweight #dis
In trending days the
tecnology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
exobidant
greatly exceeding bounds of reason or moderation
exorbitant
contribute
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contributes
for
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in
to
 developing
of
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in
 the country.Social media is very celeb for various types of data
transmittion
the act of sending a message; causing a message to be transmitted
transmitting
transmission
transmissions
.
some
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Some
 use
this
 media
for
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to
 rise up their standard
futhermore they
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furthermore, they
furthermore they
Futhermore they
 connected with each other and share our feelings. In
up coming
of the relatively near future
upcoming
 passages we are
disscussing
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discussing
 their views. Social media is profitable these days
to
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for
of
 cloud transmission like sending or receiving
messeges
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
messages
,
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,
news and other media.
there
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There
 are
hierarchy
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hierarchical
 of profit of these media.
Firstlyit
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Firstly, it
Firstly it
 is
favorble
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 for
education
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educational
 purposes like with the help of the media students
previalance
the quality of prevailing generally; being widespread
prevalence
 their all types of
superstions
an irrational belief arising from ignorance or fear
superstitions
 an can get lack of knowledge.
Secondly it
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Secondly, it
 is very constructive in
vfield
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the v field
v field
 of
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
.
bussiness
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Business
Bussiness
 owner organise online meetings with our staffs and supervise their work progress at every place.
Thirdly by
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Thirdly, by
 the use of social media
,
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,
hunmans
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humans
 attached
with
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to
 each other and share the
happinings
an event that happens
happenings
 and current
affaiers
matters of personal concern
affairs
 which is on top
tending
turn sharply; change direction abruptly
trending
. On the flip side there
are
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is
lack
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a lack
 of detriment of
socal
relating to human society and its members
social
 media. IN
adittion some
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addition, some
addition some
 starts disuse of these media for spreading distinguish fake news or
rumors
gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
rumours
.
Morever individuals
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Moreover, individuals
Moreover individuals
 are
errotic
(chemistry) of or relating to or containing one or more benzene rings
aromatic
 because they waste our
pricious
characterized by feeling or showing fond affection for
precious
 time for watching
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 types of violence and
vulgur
lacking refinement or cultivation or taste
vulgar
 movies and other articles. At
last
 they lose their attention from goals. In conclusion social media has both
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 or negative effects.
while
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While
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe
advantages
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the advantages
 outweigh disadvantages
.
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.
but
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But
still its
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still, it's
still it's
 important to use of these
service
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services
 wisely.
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