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Q.) Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education plays a salient role In developing one's career. Few believe that it is optimum for children to get their education from gender-specific schools. Whereas, others are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 that co-educational will be salutary. In my opinion,
both
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 the sides followed by the conclusion. To commence with, it has been seen that in the
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 few years children are not able to score sufficient marks.
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that, their
 academic performance is becoming
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worse
 day by day and the most prominent espousing reason behind
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 is no restrictions on them in
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to which one gender at school converts
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converts which one gender at school
to which one gender at school converts
 friendship into love and later on, their studies are impacted just because their desire was to keep their relationship at zenith and not concentrating enough on studies. To cite an example, In India,
majority
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the majority
 of children lack in learning because they fail to give importance to their studies which in the end
effects
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affects
 their growth which later on becomes detrimental for their career to survive.
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, studying together in the same school without gender inequality can help
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 girls and boys to assist each other in their education. As there are several subjects in which girls score superior marks
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 as Mathematics and Science.
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the boys
 can take the benefit and
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 can ask for a help in guiding them on the challenging subject. To illustrate, In New Delhi, India, a myriad of cases have been seen where
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the girls
 not only secure top three
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ranks
 in exam results, but
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 help their male colleagues as well whenever they get bewildered in any of the topics. To conclude, no doubt separate school will help
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 boys and girls to achieve remarkable output.
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, there a plethora of merits as well if they are educated together.
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, I elucidate my views that no curtailment should be there on the basis of gender.

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