The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the proportion of households
with
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owning and renting
accommodation
between two countries, namely; England and Whales
since
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1918 to 2011.
Overall
, rental housing shows
upward
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an upward
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trend in the first half of the year
while
it exceeds
by
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housing ownership over the
last
years. Both of these are shown
equilibrium
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as equilibrium
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in 1971. At the start of the period leased houses
was
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highest around 75% of total households.
Then
, it
was
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leveled
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off at just
fewer
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less
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than 70% between 1939 and 1953. It
was
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declined modestly to around 80% in 1961. In 1971, both of these accommodations
were
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remained equal at 50%.
After
this
, it
was
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gradually decreased over the
next
two decades. And
at the end
of
2011
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the leased
accommodation
was a minimal increase by a small fraction. Ownership of housing was at
the
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lowest in 1918 around just over 20%. Owned
accommodation
was
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remained constant nearly at 30% in the almost
next
one and
half
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decade
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.
However
, after stability in owned and rented
accommodation
in 1971,
the
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rented
accommodation
had a gradual fall as compared to owning
accommodation
. It
is
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ended up close to 30%
at the end
of the period in 2011.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, next".
Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • households
  • accommodation
  • owned
  • rented
  • prevalent
  • transition period
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • analyze
  • summarize
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