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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Nowadays, tourism plays a vital role in their financial growth. Most of the
peoples
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people
 are
started
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starting
 to visit local as well as foreign attractive places. It helps local people in various ways. Some people argue that the government should take more charges of visiting fees from migrated guests than the native peoples. While the main noticeable point is they came to visit our
country for
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country, for
 understanding the culture of our native society and enjoy our attractive places. In my point of view, I partially agree with the argument and I will discuss both points of view. In the beginning, the iconic slogan of our
country
, 'The Guest is God '.
So according
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So, according
 to the
country
's culture, we treated every guest as a god. In case we charged more than the native visitor, there is a misconception will be happening to the foreign visitors
for
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to
 our
country
.
Then
, outsiders ill not prefer a particular
country
 for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
. It will a bad impact on government revenue as well as small tourism businesses. The
noticeable
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notification
 part is, foreign guests are the major source of spreading a particular
country
's culture throughout the world.
On the other hand
, From foreign visitors, the government can get more income. So they can utilize these extra charges in maintenance and providing extra facilities like toilets, street lights, transportation facilities.
Moreover
, tourism is the primary source of economy for many countries in the universe. So they need to charge more as
comped
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comps
 to native visitors. To conclude, equal visiting charges for both foreign as well as local visitors are more beneficial for the
country even
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country, even
 some
country
 depends on
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 they should take midway to solve the issue.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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