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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that job stability is more important than satisfaction.
Although
, people’s
first
 reaction is to agree with
such
 statement.
However
, there are compelling reasons to refute
this
 claim. In the following paragraphs, there are a number of reasons for a more in-depth discussion on both sides of
this
 issue.
First
, stable income is very important for people with families. Take
for example
, my friend Talha, whose husband is an air pilot. He loves his job, travels around the world every month.
However
, quarantine restrictions left him unemployed. Even though restrictions are over, he won’t be able to catch up with bills piled for months. From
such
 example,
its
the thing named or in question
it
 is clear that a guaranteed job is a big deal for a family.
On the other hand
, some people argue that professional satisfaction is more important for the young generation. Because they need to have freedom to be creative, autonomous and self-starting. So, they will devote all their hearts to these causes.
For example
, my little brother is a trauma surgeon.
Although
 it is quite tedious and dangerous, he finds achievements in having an effect in some’s life. So, people need to have a sense of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 to motivate their energy. In
conclusion it
Accept comma addition
conclusion, it
 should be said that none of the parties
has
Suggestion
have
 absolutely no benefits.
However
, I agree with the position that satisfaction is more important. Since we speed up most of our
working
marked by full consciousness or alertness
waking
 hours, we need to be enthusiastic.
Otherwise
, one day we will be burned to the ground.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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