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high level of education is needed to live our Correct article usage
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life
better. Some undergraduate students might stay with their parents Fix the agreement mistake
lives
whereas
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both views of self-staying.
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life
might hurt them with Use synonyms
the
loneliness. Correct article usage
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For example
, even though they can do whatever they want they would sometimes miss their family and Linking Words
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this
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such
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the
unstable mentality.
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, they Linking Words
also
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the
economic issues. They are not able to earn money because the obligation of Correct article usage
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the student
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students
the
limited budget. Correct article usage
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, when their parents send them money monthly, Linking Words
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such
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, students barely consume the money Linking Words
due to
the shortage of budget, so their economic problems might affect their social Linking Words
life
.
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are going to be mature. In spite of the fact that there are some disadvantages Correct your spelling
they
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exist,
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in
independent
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an independent
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also
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good
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a good
for
the student to be an adult.
In conclusion, it is Change preposition
on
the
good opportunity for Correct article usage
a
student
when it comes to living away from family. Fix the agreement mistake
students
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, we need to encourage them to stay with their family for some personal issues. They are not Linking Words
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ready
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society yet, they need more time to be Change preposition
into
being
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