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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The table represents the children who attended the school from the year 2000 to 2009.It has community
schools
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 showing a constant increase when
compare
Change the form of the verb
compared
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 with others.In the year 2000, the voluntary-controlled
schools
 have
number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of percentage
then
Replace the word
than
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 the other
schools
, but it started decreasing in the period
2005
Change preposition
between 2005
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 and 2009. Similar to voluntary -control
school
Fix the agreement mistake
schools
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,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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specialist
schools
 and grammar
schools
 are showing a constant decrease.In the term 2005, they showed half of the percentage is reduced and it keeps on reducing in 2009. From the
table
Add a comma
,table
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 it shows
the
Correct your spelling
that
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community-
Correct your spelling
community schools
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schools
 are the only one which has increased in
number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of children who is attending the school.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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