Some people think to produce happier society we must ensure that there is only a small difference in earning between the rich and the poor. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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have different opinions about whether a smaller disparity of salary between the rich and the poor can lead to a better

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or not. In my opinion,

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could be better off by having a smaller disparity between the rich and the poor. There are several reasons why a smaller gap between the rich and the poor can benefit our

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.

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, studies have

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that there is a positive correlation between violence, antisocial

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and

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the level of payment

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the poor, we could theoretically reduce the crime rate.

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, by introducing a higher remuneration to the poor group, the living standard of

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who are paid under average wages could be enhanced to a certain level. In

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case, the

overall

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competitiveness of a

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could

be risen

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and

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drive the business successfully. In the long term, the economy would be invigorated, tax revenues could be increased and

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prosperity

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can

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be envision

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, sociologists

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suggested that the great difference

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wage

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between the rich and poor has been a key maker to

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a deviated standard for millennials to define a person’s value. To be specific, in nowadays

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, more and more

people

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have a

bias

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and disrespectful attitude toward the

lower payment

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group of

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as

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considering them

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failure

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or mundane.

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be reflected

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the widespread

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bullying events and unequal

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in

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or school. In conclusion,

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I understand that there are surely other pivotal measures to improve our

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, I believe that narrowing the disparity between the rich and the poor could ensure us a safer and well-being

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