Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

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It is considered by some people that parents should allow their children to make their own decisions on what they want to eat or what they want to wear and ever which shows or movies they want to watch, which will make a community if people who think of their own desire.
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would shed light on both the notion and give my point of view. Obviously it will help them to understand their own taste of food, style and what they are interested to watch because when they will grow up they have to buy their own clothes and in
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a family wants to watch a movie and everyone has their personal genre, there for everyone have to adjust with others, but there if anyone argues and start watching what he like, will make him selfish and create a bad relation with his family member. There is
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some situation in which a child needs to make his own decision so that from an early age, they can face the problem and learn how to bear them, but still there is some matter that cannot be solved by a young brain and at that moment they need to take the advice of their parents because sometimes it's seen that children take some inappropriate steps in order to come out of a situation which ruins their entire life. In my opinion, letting children make decision on their own make them more in responsible for a
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ill make them wise yet there are some matters when they should involve their parents because they have a lot of experience and know how to face it. In conclusion, some time children should make their own choice so that they can bare the outer world but still they should
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include their parents in some situation and apart from that their daily life choice should be made by their own so that they can be less dependent on others in future
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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