Some people that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.

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In our contemporary world a crucial issue is the question about people' proper nutrition and
care
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about their
health
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. Some people believe that a rational idea is to independently organize people to check their
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health but
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health, but
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
say that it is
government
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's obligation
responsibility
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. I believe that in some cases it is the business of state administration but at the same time it is the
responsibility
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of individuals. On the one hand, it seems to be a reasonable idea to arrange healthy check of citizen by the authorities owing to the fact that people replenish the state budget by paying taxes.
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, they have the right to receive
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service from the
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, developed countries
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as the USA fund hospitals from the state budget.
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why these countries have a highly developed
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health care
system.
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, I suppose that
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health care
programs arranged by the
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is
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are
safer owing to the fact that
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hospital
doctors are professionals.
Government
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employs certified doctors and it allows to improve the quality of
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patient
care
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.
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, I believe that it is logical that that residents should take
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of their
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themselves owing to the fact that they should make some
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about their own
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, they have
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the opportunity
an opportunity
of choice of nutrition and
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they can control their daily exercises.
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, individuals can set their own healthy schedule and follow it every day. In conclusion, I believe that
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about
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peoples
'
health
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is
joint
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the joint responsibility
a joint responsibility
responsibility
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of both
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and citizens. No doubt, improving of people' lifestyle and healthy is possible if the
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invest
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invests
the
health
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system, as well as citizens themselves monitor their own
health
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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