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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus on rising kids and less on their working life.

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It is a well-known fact that women have
innate childcare ability
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the innate childcare ability
an innate childcare ability
. They
also
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 achieve success at work.
Nevertheless
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, some people suggest that it is a sensible idea for women to concentrate on raising children and abandon their career. I partly agree with
this
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 statement for the following reasons. I believe that women take care about kids better than men owing to the fact that they have more profound knowledge in
children
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child
 psychology and health. I suppose
this
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 happened due to historical circumstances that originated when world society was divided into male role and female. From the beginning of creation world men hunted and protected their families, while at the time women stayed at home and spent their time with young kids.
As a result
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, over the centuries, while men mainly provided for the family, women are believed to have developed
such
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 innate abilities,
for instance
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, teaching their child essential communicative skills.
On the other hand
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, in many
families women's
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families, women's
 earnings
is
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are
 equal to or greater than men's incomes.
Therefore
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, women can share the burdens of earning money with their men after they return from maternity leave. Another way, women and men should divide their childcare responsibility after their kids grow up and get stronger. To recapitulate, I strongly believe that decision of
raise
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raising
 children or go to work depends on
women
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women's
 preferences.
However
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, the chores of education and child-raising should be divide between women and men.
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