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The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000.

The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000.
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The diagrams show the alternations of
this
 city at two different stages between 1700 and 2000. The first picture is describing what the city
likes
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was likes
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at
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in
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 1700. It is obvious to see that a
bridge
 across the river and a road
join
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junction
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 with the
bridge
.
At
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On
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 the left side of the
bridge
, it was a large side of farmland. Across
to
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apply
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the river, there
was
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were
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 the woods growing at the right side of the
bridge
 which separates the castle and
market
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marketplace
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place
.
At
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In
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 2000,
it is clear that
 the
place
 has an earth-shaking change in 300 years. We can easily find that a bypath was added to the original
bridge
 and a set of
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the building
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building
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buildings
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 was built on the quondam farmland. The
market
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marketplace
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place
was disappear
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disappeared
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 and the castle was replaced by a school.
In
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The
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the
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apply
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behind of the new school, a railway was constructed
to
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for
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 convenient daily life. Several changes took
place
 in
this
 city. The first one is a bypath
was
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that was
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 added
on
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to
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 the
bridge
, it is good to lighten the loan on the main
bridge
. The
second
 one is the castle has been demolished in order to make the way for
new
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the new
a new
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 school. What’s more, the
market
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marketplace
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place
was disappear
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disappeared
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 in 300 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bridge, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • land use
  • expansion
  • transformation
  • modernization
  • industrial
  • recreational facilities
  • housing development
  • transportation networks
  • demolished
  • constructed
  • preserved
  • evolution
  • adaptation
  • architectural styles
  • cityscape
  • historical preservation
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