The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart illustrates the details
about
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of
thousand
cardiac arrests in the USA per year, all males
and females of different range
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ranges
the
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ages
are divided into three categories, 29-44, 45-64, and 65 and above.
Overall
, more men of all ages
are the sufferer of heart attacks in America as compared to women
. The most prone age group is seniors in their mid-sixties, whereas
adults until mid-forties
are at the least risk of Correct pronoun usage
their mid-forties
this
, especially women
.
Evidently, according to
the bar graph, 440 thousands
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thousand
of
men get a cardiac attack at the age of 65 and more, Change preposition
apply
while
women
are a little lower in number with 374 thousand
of
the same age group. Change preposition
in
Ages
range from 45 to 64; the substantial amount of males
is almost equally at risk as category 65+, with 424 thousand
, whereas
merely 136 thousand
of
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women
are encountering this
issue.
Lastly
, the third
case is from ages
29 to 44, people lying in this
range are less vulnerable to catch
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catching
this
disease, mainly females are negligible as compared to males
with only 3000, whereas
males
are significantly high in number with 123 thousand
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