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Employer sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are two views about some queries which are asked by employers from employees about personal
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 their passion in terms of advantages and relationship.Personally, I believe that the benefits of
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 method do outweigh the drawbacks. Actually, asking questions of people who intend to
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 in a position is the best way for employers in order to find that interviewees can do some assignments in terms of hardship, tolerance, and so on, these are the things employers would definitely be fascinated by.
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, through
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 way they can recognize the interest of employees so as to consider a relevant position for them. What is more, if employers have some
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 about employees they can prepare some facilities for them and
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 stimulate them to do their workloads in terms of quality and
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 productivity as well.
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, some people have the opinion that
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 matter is futile. In fact, companies and offices need some essential
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 of people,
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 as
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 experience, education, skills, and so on. These people may think that personal
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 is a privacy or worthless for employers.
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, they do not like to care about people who apply for jobs, in fact, they only expect to see the results of
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 efficiency. In conclusion, in my view, all employers should ask personal
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 from employees to make a harmonious atmosphere for them due to improvements in jobs and
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 produce motivation for workers.

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