The crime rate amoung teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

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Nowadays, illegal

acts among youngsters has increased substantially in many territories.There must be several reasons and solutions for

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matter which it will be discussed

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all the way through

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as social media and

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the paucity

of parental control that I think it can be solved with

supervison

management by overseeing the performance or operation of a person or group

supervision

of parents and holding

counceling

something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action

counselling

sessions. On the one hand

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social media is playing a vital role in today's modern life

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making it more challenging for fathers and mothers to manage their children

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because they can see a lot of

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content

which can make them do undesired things

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as delinquency.

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there was a teenager that held up a gathering

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their house through online social

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media, which

it ended up for him to be arrested

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because of drugs that other members of the gathering brought with them to use throughout the party

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there are solutions to deal with

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problem that made many of people exhausted.One of which could be more

supervison

management by overseeing the performance or operation of a person or group

supervision

parents especially

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parents, especially

on social media by means of enrolling their children to sports activities and other helpful activities which can make them busy.

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furthermore

in addition

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holding

counceling

something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action

counselling

sessions

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some point can make them back to normal life with the help of

psycologists

a scientist trained in psychology

psychologists

psychologist

sociologists

and other experts

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To sum up

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parents or guardians should be more aware of what their children do so that in case of troubles they can manage the situation and help them out

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under

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Under

these circumstances teenagers could be more

knowledgable

highly educated; having extensive information or understanding

knowledgeable

about their precious life

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

250 words

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Dramatically
Parental supervision
Peer pressure
Economic inequality
Desensitize
Aggressive behavior
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Substance abuse
Gang culture

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The crime rate amoung teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

Fully explain your ideas

In recent years, women's roles have changed dramatically. What changes have occurred? Do you think these changes are positive or negative

•Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that young people electronic and computer games is helpful while the others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.