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Topic: The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use cars?

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It is clear that The 21st century is the age of technology.
Thus
, most people's lifestyles are related to technologies.
For instance
: computer technologies,
car
 ones and other various technologies.
without
Suggestion
Without
 a shadow of doubt, I can say that nowadays the number of cars more and more in the world. Because, everyone knows that most of the people
are
introduces an alternative
or
 use
from
Suggestion
of
 them cars at themselves work fields. Now I am going to set out that The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. The
first
 justification is that if a
car
 is driven by a person for a long time, that person may come down with from different diseases,
such
 as eye diseases.
In particular
, that person can put on, being excessive.
Furthermore
, it can bring on other serious illness.
Although
 it can bring
on
Suggestion
about
 various diseases, cars need to us in our lives. Another point to note is that some people can never be turned away from their purpose,
that is
 to say, they cannot be head off from driving too much.
However
, they shouldn't drive a
car
 so much. Because, if they drive a
car
 so much,
consequently
 various traffic accidents may occur.To put in a nutshell, as I have mentioned above, unless we follow the above considerations, we may cause damage both to ourselves and to other people.
if
Suggestion
If
 we are tired of working too much,
that is
 to say, we are stressed at work, we should have a break from our work. Broadly speaking, we ought to always protect ourselves from disasters that lead to various diseases.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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