Topic: Some people think that natural disasters are inevitable, while others argue they can be avoided.

On a daily basis natural
disasters
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disaster
occur occasionally.
last
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Last
night
this
incident happened in my area. The natural disaster change around
territory
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the territory
of Bukhara
that is
to say several parts of Bukhara were damaged by the natural disaster.
For example
: some trees broke, fruits spilled, some roofs of houses flew away, buildings were damaged and other different things were harmed. Some people think that natural disasters are inevitable, while others argue they can be avoided. That's true. Because there are both sides of the theme.
Thus
, now I bring up
this
subject. The
first
important thing I should mention is that natural disasters are a danger to process. Without a shadow of doubt, I can say that most of the people come up with that natural disasters very dangerous and inevitable.
truth
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Truth
to be told, I think so too.
On the other hand
, we should not worry
this
incident. In other word we could
avoided
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avoid
this
incident
that is
to say we should watch
whether
the atmospheric conditions that comprise the state of the atmosphere in terms of temperature and wind and clouds and precipitation
weather
forecast from on TV and we should take precautions against
this
situation. In the light of these facts, my point is that we must be prepared for any disasters that may occur at any time. As I have mentioned
above we
Accept comma addition
above, we
ought to always protect ourselves from various disasters!!
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