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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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# Some people said that " You should never stop learning because life never stops teaching".
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Thus there
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Thus, there
 are a
lot
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 of unstudied things that we should learn and accustom others too. Herein age does not matter, the knowledge
is the
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is, the
 more crucial that to be studied. But some people think there are nothing that young people can teach to older people. Personally, I absolutely disagree with
this
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 statement and in
this
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 essay I will explain my disagreement with some details.
Initially
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, there
are
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is
 a
lot
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 of knowledge that young people can teach to older people. Personally, we must never give up learning because life never stops teaching and we can learn
smth
a quantity of money
sums
 from each other. Herein age does not matter because young people might know more than older or they know some
informations
a message received and understood
information
 that older people do not know.
For
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instance young
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instance, young
 people are more active. Young adults climb mountains, ski and spend time in
garden
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the garden
a garden
. There is not secret that some older people are very passive. They can feel tired, sore or if they cannot do
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 unmotivated quickly. It is vital to learn from
younger generation
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a younger generation
the younger generation
 that movements does not needy for stay active that boring gym or tedious yoga. There a
lot
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 of
funny
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fun
 ways to stay active.
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, now we are living in a technology century and day by day it becomes to a peak. And we can say that
younger generation
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the younger generation
 is
occured
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occurring
occurred
 the most crucial part of people who use technology. And youth can teach using technology to connect. There are a
lot
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 of social media websites,
such
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 as telegram,
instagram
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,
facebook
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Facebook
, twitter and so on. They are easy to make a friend, gives a
lot
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 of news and helps to spend time awesome with them. Kids or grandkids can teach how to use them. And
then
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 older people can make new friends
,
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,
or they can news easily and they spend
time significant
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significant time
time signing
time signing signing
. On the whole, there is no matter who teach us, the knowledge is more crucial to us. Everyone can teach
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someone with an assured and ingratiating manner
smoothie
 from their experience and herein age is trivial.
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