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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
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The bar chart illustrates the statistics
of
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 expenditure on six things in four European nations. The units have measured in thousand pounds sterling (
TPS
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).
Overall
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, apparently, consumers spent a large sum of money on all the given six goods in Britain;
however
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, it was the least in Germany. Evidently, Britain spent the biggest amount
to purchase
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photographic
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the photographic
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 film,
was
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more than 170
TPS
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,
whereas
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, nighed 155
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 was spent on tennis racquets and personal stereos.
Moreover
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, France was the
second
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 purchaser of the provided goods, where toys and CDs consumed the same amount nearly 157
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; it was alleviated with approximately 12
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 for tennis racquets.
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, the sold rate of toys was in the first rank in Italy with around 157
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, and it started fluctuating between
other
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 five products and reached 150
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 for personal stereos.
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, Germany was the lowest spending country, which bought tennis racquets
fir
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 150
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,
in contrast
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, photographic films and compact disks were sold at the cost of near about 146
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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