Nowadays, older people who need employment have to compete with younger people. What problems does this cause, and what are the solutions?

In recent years, competition is increasing
between
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among
young people and
the old
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older
who are searching for
same
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the same job
job
. It causes some negative consequences and steps should be taken to tackle
this
problem. There are some problems occur when the young and
old are
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old, are
struggling to get the
job
.
First
of all, elderly people are not very
adaptive
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adaptable
and creative as
youngers
a scheming person; someone who schemes to gain an advantage
anglers
infers
are and they do not very energetic to do
work
like younger. They may find some difficulties with
usage
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the usage
of technology and to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the requirements of company which could affect on their health and they might suffer both physically and psychologically. Older people have more difficulties to find a
job
even when they have
same qualifications
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the same qualifications
as younger and
have
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has
experience
also
. While, some employers prefer older people with higher working
experience
rather than younger who have just graduated and having no
work
experience
and good communication skills. To solve
this
problem government should take some initiative in
effective way
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an effective way
. Government
should encourages
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should encourage
self-employment for fresh graduates so they can create
job
opportunities themselves.
Then
the retirement age should be
decreased which
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decreased, which
reduce the pressure of competition the young have to face. Another possible way is to allocate more money to
pension system
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the pension system
because who find their pension sufficient for a living will not have to find a
work
.
Moreover
, younger people and government should support
older person
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older people
the older person
to use new technologies so they can do
work
well. In conclusion, some problems occur in competition of youth and old to get
job
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jobs
like technology and
experience
related but
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related, but
it can be solved by taking some measures like decrease retirement age and increase pension.

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