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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disavdantages to living in a house compared with living in an apartment

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It is important for people to consider which kind of accommodation is the best.
However
, There is often a debate among people, whether is is advantageous to live in an apartment or a
house
.
This
 essay is going to explain why I believe that the drawbacks of living in a
house
 are outweighed by its benefits compared to life in an apartment. Looking
firstly
 at the negatives, the most important one is that houses are less secure.
This
 is a problem as it can be easier for the burglars to break-in.
For example
, most houses tend to be only one or two storeys high and are
also
 generally not secured by security guards and CCTV cameras for surveillance.
On the other hand
, apartments are usually more secure, as they have a security guard to guard them and
also
 are equipped with surveillance cameras and other forms of criminal deterrence.
Nevertheless
, a
house
 offers several benefits
such
 as they are more spacious and more private. With regards to the former, houses often have more rooms, which can be useful for families with children. As for the latter, houses are usually built far from each other, which can prevent noise from the
house
 carrying to the neighbouring residents.
For instance
, large families with kids, generally require separate rooms for their children so that they can study without outside interference.
In contrast
, apartments are often small and families live in close proximity to each other.
As a result
, the privacy provided by houses cannot be offered by flats. In conclusion, in my opinion, the advantages of space and privacy provided by houses outweighs the disadvantage of security in comparison with an apartment.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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