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The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
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The following graphs present how many resources the
world
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population
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 intake and what are they spending their national budget for. It is clear from illustrations that
the
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 three fifth of resources are consumed by the USA and Europe, despite the fact that their
population
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 accounts for only 14%
for
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 each of them. Now turning to the details, just under a quarter (24%) of
world
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 spending is directed to providing food,
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however
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 the majority (40%) of
world
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 spending comprises other unknown categories. It can be seen from the charts that transport expenses make up 18%,
while
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 housing expenses account for only 12%. The countries spend only 6% of their budget on clothing. It is worth mentioning that just over
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half of
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the world
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world
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population
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 accounts for Asians,
whereas
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 African people make up 10% and 5% comprises the other
population
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 of the
world
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.
Overall
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,
the
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most part of
budget
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the budget
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 of
world
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 countries is spent
for
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on
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 some needs, except transport, food, housing and clothing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • data
  • spending habits
  • consumption
  • resources
  • population distribution
  • comparison
  • patterns
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • implications
  • disparities
  • environmental consequences
  • social impacts
  • sustainability
  • economic development
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