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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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From the perspective of some individuals
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it is believed that deriving pleasure from personal
job
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 is more important than
job
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 security
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whereas others consider that having a long-term
job
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 is more important than personal satisfaction.Both views of thos opinion will be discussed before my own opinion is mentioned in a conclusion. On the one hand
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doing their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
job
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 and gaining enjoy can be more essential for ones who prefer their personal interests.They can think that all people live once
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and because of it
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they have to try to accumulate more pleasure rather than more
money
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 and comfort.
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when people do any
job
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 which is out of their personal interests
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the quality of their work can decrease and in
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 case it may affect their mood and the quantity of
money
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 which they earn.It means that if someone do something with love and pleasure
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it may be better than compulsory work
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in
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money
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On the other hand
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others can consider permanent
job
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 more crucial.
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In
 their opinion
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it may be true that having
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job guarantee
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a job guarantee
 means having
money
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 and more comfortable lifestyle.It is
undenyable
not possible to deny
undeniable
 that in our modern life,
money
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 can solve many problems and life without problems can be
equal happier lifestyile
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an equally happier lifestyle
equal happier lifestyle
equally happier lifestyle
equal happier lifestyles
equally happier lifestyile
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In addition
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 to
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permanent
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 can give opportunities them to relax and travel more
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and at that time they can
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 derive their personal satisfaction and release their
strees
the relative prominence of a syllable or musical note (especially with regard to stress or pitch)
stress
stories
stores
. Taking everything into consideration,while some people find permanent
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 more crucial and important for their life,from my personal view personal satisfaction is more important
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