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Some people think that changing people’s attitude to other countries and cultures is an important factor in reducing world poverty. Others, however, feel that the most important method is trade. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that many people have an idea of shifting people's attitude to other countries and cultures is a significant
way
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 in decreasing
world
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poverty
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 while others think trade is the most important
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 to fall down the
world
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poverty
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. From my point of view, I think these two ideas have benefits in their own
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, described in the following paragraph. Changing people's attitude to other countries and
culture
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 is an essential factory because when we learned about the different countries and
culture
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 with opened heart to understand and ready to make friends.
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Therefore we
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Therefore, we
 can make a
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 more unity by our friendship.
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Additionally we
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Additionally, we
 have to learn how to respect and willing to understand the people from different
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 to avoid
culture
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 shock that could happen.
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 friendship is the best
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 to reducing
world
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poverty
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. Trading is
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 a good
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 too. Every country can make the profit with trading. It's made them want to trade and want to connect to other countries.
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, they can trade in their country, but they will get the thing that non familiar than what they have because they live in the same land that might have same geographic. Trading with other countries will gain them many different things they want especially a profit. To conclude, These two
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method
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methods
 have their own
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 of making the
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 unity, But they
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 have their
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 of benefit. Friendship may help reduce the
world
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poverty
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. In contrary, it is undeniable that human need money and profit and trading could give them. A different
method
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 can process the different result.
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