Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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In the era of the sedentary
Use synonyms
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
we choose the
beat
the supreme effort one can make
best
and
possible way
Suggestion
a possible way
possible ways
to get lots
oof
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
money in future.
Linking Words
Therefore one
Accept comma addition
Therefore, one
of the
reason
Suggestion
reasons
should be there that learner
choose
Suggestion
chooses
the study abroad due to the study and settle
into
Suggestion
in
the foreign country to earn huge package of the money. In the
begning
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
of the world so many people can migrate from one country or one region
tp
in the direction of
to
another region for their better
life
Use synonyms
.
Linking Words
However trend
Accept comma addition
However, trend
should be
same but
Accept comma addition
same, but
change is that now youngster can move for their
further
Linking Words
study due to the
chane
cause to change; make different; cause a transformation
change
in the
life
Use synonyms
style and
offcourse
Suggestion
to live the sedentary
Use synonyms
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
For instance
Linking Words
aacordingly
(sentence connectors) because of the reason given
accordingly
to the research of
american
of or relating to the United States of America or its people or language or culture
American
society in
america
North American republic containing 50 states - 48 conterminous states in North America plus Alaska in northwest North America and the Hawaiian Islands in the Pacific Ocean; achieved independence in 1776
America
most of the learner
migrate
Suggestion
migrates
from the different country who were
stteled
established or decided beyond dispute or doubt
settled
steeled
stalled
down there and give the impact on the economy. Because the native of
america
North American republic containing 50 states - 48 conterminous states in North America plus Alaska in northwest North America and the Hawaiian Islands in the Pacific Ocean; achieved independence in 1776
America
were jobless but
forienger
a person who comes from a foreign country; someone who does not owe allegiance to your country
foreigner
get
Suggestion
gets
the job.
On the other hand
Linking Words
student moved from to
earned
Suggestion
earn
the money as well. I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that
it
it is
it's
us
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
possible that they will migrate from native nation to the foreign

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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