Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Is well known that young people like travelling even more when they are
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. Travelling during your adolescence is a good idea because they can extract very good vibes
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Check the Essay Start Timer Sign in / Sign up 0 paragraphs 0 words Several positive experiences.
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they are going to meet new people, new places, new cultures and
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they will make new friends and
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is an experience that they will never forget. In the case of working during
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they are going to learn the value of money and how hard is
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it but not only to motivate themselves to study
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how to manage your money because you know the value of
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it by themselves. But
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it could break the habits of study and it could be a problem if they decide to restart
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the university because after leaving studying for a long time is well known
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seated in front of your computer or get up early and going to class. In my opinion, I would recommend
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both activities, it will help
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grow up as a person and to know better
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as going abroad far from their families and
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out new and great experiences and
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because when you are older you have more responsibilities and is more difficult to do that.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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