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Universities should accept equal numbers of female and male students in every subjects. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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Universities should accept equal numbers of female and male students in every
subjects
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. To what extend do you agree or disagree. It is argued that similar chances should be given to both genders to study in their
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 subjects at universities. I contend that
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 allegation is true because imposing restrictions will hamper individual’s development.
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, I believe that it is premature to judge that the dissimilarity between genders in
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 specific case has no redeeming features. On the one hand, it is true that enough freedom should be given to each person to pursue their ambitions.
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 why when the acceptance of students at college for each subject is based on their aptitude and knowledge, seeds of hope are planted in their heart and
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 they have more inclination to flourish their unveiled skills. Under
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 circumstance, they make tremendous efforts to become a useful member of their societies.
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, if the situation is against their expectation, these students will feel frustrated as realizing that they become a victim of gender discrimination and there is no way to
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 their dreams.
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, it is fair to say that there is a myriad of contrasts between males and females by their nature,
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 as their abilities, characteristics, and so forth. For
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 reason, it is suggested that when it comes to accepting them for subjects at college some criteria should be set to make sure whether majors are suitable for them or not. Taking my home country as an example, decision makers have imposed quotas on subject called mechanical engineering for males, and nursing for females because their personalities are more adjustable with these subjects. In conclusion, while it is valuable that educational institutes attempt to make a balance between the acceptance of men and women for subjects at universities, I tend dissimilarities between
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being one more than one
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 genders should be taken into account simultaneously.
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