The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
The line graph illustrates the
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
books
read by male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
at the Burnaby Library in four years 2011, 2012, 2013, and 2014.
Fix the agreement mistake
females
Overall
, the line graph shows a gradual increase except number
of women decreased Change the article
the number
from
Change preposition
in
last
Correct article usage
the last
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
year
in the given period. It is evident that women read more than the
men, Correct article usage
apply
however
, last
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
year
it changed a
male reader number increased, whilst Correct article usage
the
female
number plunged.
With regards to the Correct article usage
the female
amount
of male readers, it began at around 3000 Change the quantifier
number
books
in 2011 and it increased a merely
five hundred, which was 3500 in 2012. Following that, it soared Replace the word
mere
at
approximately 10000 in 2013 and it reached 14000 Change preposition
to
books
in the final year
of the period given.
Women, meanwhile, it was 2000 books
more than men at the beginning of the figure. Female reading numbers was
increased gradually in the following two years (2012, 2013), 8000 and 10000 Unnecessary verb
apply
books
, respectively before dropped
Wrong verb form
dropping
sharp
Change the adjective
sharply
at
8000 in the Change preposition
to
last
year
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