Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

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In todays society

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every individual is striving to achieve his best.In fact the job availability for the is less and competition is high. In

this

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situation, people with experience and struggling hard to survive their position.Which indirectly create tough time for the youth to handle

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chaos.

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, the situation leads a major impact on the youth

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although

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they have good education

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but lack of experience gives them a difficult to manage their existence. In other word, there is an employment and

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taking a different track fir survival, which it

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a nuisance for the society and create a bad impression on the community.

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, the government should take a major step of arranging the job requirements which will be taken care of existing and

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the new generation who want to explore their skills. Experienced employee should be given a department change or should be adjusted to the where experience individual required. In conclusion, competition and the youth related issues should handle in a more systematic way, in order to prevent the difference in society. Which would liberal the mentality and give a opportunity to enhance their skill and lead a better place for existence

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

194 words

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Personal fulfillment
Unfulfilling job
Mental health
Physical health
Financial stability
Job security
Societal norms
Career choices
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Practicality
Personal growth
Skill development
Self-esteem
Social status
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Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

Fully explain your ideas

The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in the city in the UK.

Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing sof skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you think it is the best way to deal with a disruptive child in the classroom? What other solutions are there?

In most cities and towns, the high volumes of road traffic become a problem. What are the causes of that and what actions could be taken to solve the problem?

Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.