Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying that entertainers like as film actors, pop musicians and Sportsman are paid too much money. I really do

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statement. Whatever, some people think there are several jobs that should be highly paid as well.In

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essay before presenting my point of view I would like to discuss the job culture

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Nowadays there is news about the celebrities who are earning more money through their

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profession, like

acting, singing and sports etc.Some of celebrities like

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sportsmen

and actor earning extra money through advertising and becoming

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the brand ambassador

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of the particular brand.There are other jobs which

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more important

for societies and they should be well paid.

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people do not realise that the existence of firefighters is crucial as they could save many people’s lives.

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, as leader of a nation, the president or prime minister has a lot of responsibilities. These professions should be well compensated in accordance with the risk and responsibilities. In conclusion, I do not think any work is big or small, it is difference created by us and I think now the time has come to stop differentiating people through their work and everybody should be paid equally for their work.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

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202 words

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endorsements
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career lifespan
popularity wanes
job security
strenuous schedules
public scrutiny
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Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not do enough physical exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are there to this problem?

It is better to learn the way people lived in past through films and videos records than written documents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people feel that it is necessary to test new medicines on animals, while other people feel that this is not fair on animals and not necessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Many people today are worried about cyber crime such as hacking and identity theft. What problems does cyber crime cause andd what solutions can you suggest for ordinary people and business to take?

Describe a time when you talked to a group of people.