Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the practical application of science to commerce or industry
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having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
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any movable possession (especially articles of clothing)
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a public promotion of some product or service
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marked by correspondence or resemblance
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undergo or be subjected to
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were wearing
had wore
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mean or intend to express or convey
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migratory
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the three most popular
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peoples
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became
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is becoming
becomes
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able to control or determine policy
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according
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the large company standard
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impacting
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the company marketing channel
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