Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Other think that face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Internet has been the most popular things in the world. Every person has known internet and most of them can't be separate with their phones.

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cyberspace has been an addict for everyone.

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, many of us argue that World Wide Web is giving more bad effects. So,

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essay would deliver some reasons and effects of surfing the wide web. The

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thing we should know that cyberspace make us closer to each other.

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connection makes people feel there is no barriers between country or time. We can contact everyone easily in

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era.

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connection brings us to a lot of new friendships because of its ease. By

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connection we

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can get a lot of new information that could help us in developing ourselves. Despite all of the positive changes. After all, every improve has its own loss. The internet makes us more individuals and less care about the environment.

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, most of the task now in school using a technology

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as laptop, notebook, and others.

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task can be easily done by surfing the web,

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student won't need to discuss with their classmates because they had done the task easily.

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effect the face to face interaction which is really good to build the social behaviour of a person. Even if the wide web made them interact with video calls, it doesn't give the same influence. Cyberspace has its own good influence if we use it according to our needs. Unless if we get the phone addiction too much it will destroy our social behave and made us individuals.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 9.0

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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Other think that face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Task 2: Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In many parts of the world today there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people’s skin. Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society.