the two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992

the two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992
The charts illustrate information about male and
females
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employment proportions in the UK in 1992 divided into 2 groups, manual and non-manual occupations with 3 broad categories in each.
Overall
, a slight majority of men doing manual work is greater than
females
.
Also
, for both sexes, management and professional careers are popular
while
general
labor
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is a small fraction. Looking in more detail, in
the
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non-manual occupations, it was preferred by
females
.
Although
females
had the highest percentage
on
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the clerk,
accounted
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for 31%, it was taken only six
by
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males. Professional positions were dominated by men, approximately 36%,
while
women's percentage was just under a
third
. Other non-manual, not specified, for both sexes were a small minority. Moving to manual employment, males doing manual work had nearly the same percentage as non-manual. There was a difference in Craftsmanship between both genders which made for 24% for men compared to women with just 3%.
Moreover
, general
laborers
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and other types of manuals were no significant differences between males' and
females
’ percentages. For
labor
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works,
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